The legend of IronMonk chapter 1-12 !!!

[IronMonk]

realize that the names in this story are subject to change, they are only working names untill i finish the story, anywhoo here it is



[Edited on 4/4/2003 by IronMonk]

[RaFF]

holy F*CK!! ya can make a friggin BOOK man!
heheh just show this to a book publisher man and you`ll be rich :D i gues...
i didn`t read it all.... i just read 1 but i haven`t got enough time to read a story 7 times as large as mine... (go check out mine too! "the story of RaFF")
but still i think it`s great! ya can become some real fantasy writer man!
just try it....

[CRAM]

Excellent job ironmonk, seriously think about maybe publishing short fantasy novels. You have a great imagination and a talent to write.

[Kalili]

Could we (lazy people) get a sumerized version soon? ;)

[IronMonk]

well its not even half finished, im planning on wrighting atleast 30 chapters, and at approx 800 words per chapter, thats a decent length story, and who knows it may even be longer.

[IronMonk]

meh the story is not going to be here for a long while


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[Bluenose]

Very nice story, read all an looking foward to the next section! :D

[IronMonk]

well now that it's spring break i will have a lot more time to work on it than i usually do. my goal is to finish all the way to chapter 15 byt the end of it. but that may be a little optemistic. anyways, the nevt chapter s are comin tonight so if yur readin this then you will be able to read more in the next few hours

[IronMonk]

hey everyone, ive taken the story off the forum so that i can still surprise you all about the ending. hopefully it is goign to be as good as i think it will. can wait for may!

[Edited on 23/3/2003 by IronMonk]

[Fhman]

That's one excellent Bio. Can I make one request. Can you please put paragraph breaks in your story. It makes it easier for feeble minds like myself to read.

Thanks

[IronMonk]

thanks for hte advice, typically i do have many paragraphs but i wrote the last chapter at 4:30 in the morning

[Uruk-Hai]

WoW, This is quiet the big story and i managed to read all of it in under 2 hours.., Man I wish I could write like that but maybe in time..., keep it up man Im pulled in by your story and need the end, even if its in another 4 hours of reading ;)

[Terevanincu]

Still great Iron keep it up :p

[IronMonk]

yah, i really would appreciate some feedback from you two about it, adn Terevanincu dont worrie your cameo is in the makeing

[IronMonk]

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[Revalence]

I've only had time to read the 1st chapter and im very impressed, now that ive got a tast of what the stories about i think ill take the time to read the whole thing.

[IronMonk]

please do, adn check back regularlly, ive been avergeing a chapter a day fo rthe past week so you you might want to becom,e a regular. also i would really like some feedback from you people who have actually read the whole thing, all 2 of you.

[IronMonk]

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[Bluenose]

Jst read the new chapters, and I find myself wondering what the suprise is gonna be.... :D

A very good story, there are parts of it where the english could be better, but most of it is almost perect. I'll read over it again in a few days and see if I can come up with some advice seing as you are wanting it :)

[IronMonk]

yah i know my gramatical skills are atracious, the irony is english is my first languige

[IronMonk]

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[Danthalas]

That clears a few things up for me concerning Raff's story. Nicely done!

[Bluenose]

mmm I dont think chapter 12 links very well onto the end of 11... it's a bit of an abrupt change.

[IronMonk]

i know, remeber this isnt even a rough draft, but the reason that it is that way is that the next chapter i have in mind is terribly long and i really didnt want to tack it onto chapter 12. i also had to bridge chapter 11 to 13, so i created that mangled mess you see before you. but i truly appreciate the help wiht the story.

[~Ice~]

long story :exclam: mine will probably be almost as long though :)
nice work

[Revalence]

......... once i think im getting near the end you go on and add more chapters... !! oye... lol ill never finish..

[IronMonk]

well there wont be anymore chapters uploaded untill i finish it, so i can still have an element of surprise so if you want you can stop now becase after i edit and tweak everything you will proble wont to read the whol e thing.. sorry.... no really stop reading it so that you will get the benifit f all the work i will do to fix it up after i finish.... are you still reading??? STOP IT NOW!!!!!, i see you wanting to read.... ok im outahere i gotta drive to lethbrige to watch my gf dance

[~Ice~]

hope the rest comes soon

[RaFF]

hey IronMonk, Is there allready a cameo for my char? :D

[Isenhorn]

"Story.... too long..... brain..... OUCH."
It's actually a great story.

[IronMonk]

thanks, if you havent read the whole thing, stop now and wait till its finished

[Bluenose]

Ive read it all... but i'll wait anyway.....

dum de dum.....

[IronMonk]

Yes RaFF you infact play a large part of my story, although he is currently away from things at the moment inthe story he will be back, at the moment, the story is 21 pages long! but its going to be about 25 pages long when im done with it,

Rylan McPhee
aka IronMonk, froglogic, IronMonkey

i go now to work on it more

[Luvtlee]

Bah...apparently I came upon this subject too late....where'd the story go?!?

[IronMonk]

i took it off to maintain some suspence about the story, there is a lot of development i wanted people to discover all at once. and also i still have to edit it, i was just throwing what i had just written up here with only running spelcheck first.