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RaFF
03-08-2003, 07:20 PM
(--->PLZ GIVE SOME COMMENT IF YA`VE READ THIS<---)
"Hey! we`ve got some company!" the outpost screamed. There`s some giant comming this direction!
The guy looked scared and quickly climbed down from the 10 meter outpost-tower.
All the elves in this nice little city started to shut their huts and just waited because melee weapons have no use against a fully armored giant and they don`t have any good magic yet.
Only one guy came out his hut, it was a magician, he sayd:"Don`t be afraid, Runus will help us".
but nobody really understood what he sayd because they don`t have a god or anything.
The magician, named Civolcan, waited in the center of the village and he raised his hands.
While the wind struggeling with his 2 feet long white beard, he just sayd:"Runus.... RaFF!!!".
After some time the giant reached the gate of the village and with just 2 hits he broke it open.
He ran to the magician and stood there a while, just looking straight out. It didn`t even look like he actually lived, so dead was his look.
But than, he just walked around Civolcan and he ran to the houses and began to kick those houses` but. :P
His eyes gained a red color and some white slime came out his mouth.
The magician just stood there with his arms raised doing nothing while this "monster" was killing Elves.
The giant heard some weird noices behind him and turned arround, it was civolcan`s spell he was casting on the giant.
The giant walked to the wizzard, without any hurry like he had killing people, and he sayd:"I`m sorry,I really don`t want to do this"
and after that, the wizzard still with raised hands, the monster lifts one hand above the wizzards head and says:"stop me before I destroy your whole city".
after that he lifts his hand further up and than comes down with FULL speed.
He hits the wizzard SO hard on his head it splitted in two, blood spattered everywhere and with his hand full of blood he goes on with his crazy act.
But than, in the sky, the clouds became wild and they turned around above the giant`s head with high speed... the sky became a bit red too... and it just keeped on going wilder and wilder until...
a big red thunder-like thing came out the sky and it hit the head of the gone-mad giant that was destroying houses and killing people (even little kids!).
the giant felled on the ground with his mouth wide open and his eyes turned away.
after some time some red transparant spirit came out his mouth very slowly and flew away into
those clouds that were still turning around and then suddenly the sky was blue again and the people
that survived this horrible "thing" started to crawl slowly out of their huts.
They saw the giant laying there on the floor and they came over to it, although very slowly.
"He`s dead! wohoo we won!" one guy yelled when all the others began to yell too.
but than, after a few minutes, the giant moved a bit and everyone was shocked.
It suddered and then became smaller very slowly until it was the size of an elf, or actually
a half-elf. It changed from color, and it became more and more like an Elf, until you couldn`t tell the difference between them. It layed there on the ground totally naked. (NO! it`s not one of my sexual fantasys! :P )
And then it opened it`s eyes. Everybody quickly set some steps backwards.
The new Elf sat straight up. All the elves were watching with big eyes and their jaws to the ground.
It spook:"Don`t be afraid, I`m on your side".
The elves just stood there wondering what just happened and then one asked:"Who, errr what are you"
The new one answered:"I`m RaFF... RaFF Runus to be axactly, now... get me some clothes!"
While one mother turned arround to get some clothes she saw, in the center of town, some wizzard shoe`s and a robe laying on the ground with a puddle of blood coming from underneath it, and next to it written with blood on the ground:"Take care of RaFF".
PLZ GIVE SOME COMMENT IF YA`VE READ THIS
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so yea... my char is a half-elf or elf (not sure yet) but actually it is a wizzard who sacreficed himself to kill a giant and then turn it into an elf.... :S
heheh you wished u came up with that idea huh?! :P
hmmm anywayz I`m not sure this is going to be my final story, maybe I`m going to change it or make up an entirely new one.
but tell me if ya liked it and give some ideas on how i can change it :D
(comments plz)


[Edited on 8/3/2003 by RaFF]

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[Edited on 9/3/2003 by RaFF]

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Kormath
03-08-2003, 08:02 PM
i like it, but the Giant died 2 fast!!!!
U should make it more exciting!!!

RaFF
03-08-2003, 08:22 PM
hmm... yea ur right, hmmm gimmi some ideas then :D

CRAM
03-08-2003, 08:31 PM
Good story raff, G00dTymRZ rates it an A
Just have the giant fight the wizard a lil more and make it sound like a scene from LOTR part 2 when galdalf fought that fire demon.

Good job though.

RaFF
03-08-2003, 08:35 PM
errmmm i havent read the book LOL
but i gtg now so i`ll change the story some other time... like tomorrow or monday
hmmm maybe do some inspiration at some fantasy sites... yea C-ya

RaFF
03-08-2003, 10:32 PM
I`m back! and i changed the story a bit... so just read it again and tell me what ya think and maybe report some fauls...

hehehe still can`t believe i made that story up myself :D

oh and btw:... i made that giant die some slower :P
o no this time it was the wizzard now that dies hard :o

[Edited on 8/3/2003 by RaFF]

CRAM
03-09-2003, 09:47 AM
Good job raff, you made excellent improvements making the story even more exciting than b4 while the previous story was still extroadinary. Make up some more stories, it'll be good to hear more about a giants revenge hehe.

RaFF
03-09-2003, 10:16 AM
but hey... thats kinda weird huh? because that giant turned into... ME!
because that magic spell, so i cant let him change back into a giant because that`ll mean I am a giant again... hmmm and how else could i let him make revenge?

CRAM
03-09-2003, 10:20 AM
I wasn't talking about his revenge, I was talking about his giant buddies that is now wondering what happened to their good friend, hehe,

RaFF
03-09-2003, 10:24 AM
oh.... yea lol there`ll be a whole bunch of giants kicking Elvenstown`s but!!
no serious i haven`t got enough inspiration yet, maybe later :D ;)

CRAM
03-09-2003, 10:26 AM
lol k np raff but as long as you follow through with your stories, that'll be awesome.

RaFF
03-09-2003, 10:28 AM
ok thnx m8.... at least ONE likes it :(
havent heard many others here

CRAM
03-09-2003, 10:30 AM
Kormath liked it, and from what I've seen from many of the chat members, they don't much go into this room anyways. So keep ur head up b/c u got more positive feedbacks then I did hehe. And also, if they didn't reply doesn't mean they don't like it, they may have just read it and moved on. If you want a feedback responce, after the story add in "please respond to my story if you have any comments."

[Edited on 9/3/2003 by CRAM]

RaFF
03-09-2003, 10:34 AM
I HAVE! thats the friggin problem man...
under the ---------- there it al stands...

CRAM
03-09-2003, 10:40 AM
O well don't hassel it, trust me. You'll gain fame soon enough.

Kormath
03-09-2003, 10:41 AM
NICE changes, but i still thinks that, when he gets hit by the lightninghe died two fast.
but I realy like it the way it is!!!

Good Job!

RaFF
03-09-2003, 10:44 AM
yea well.... i cant make him fight with an lightning? :P

Seton
03-09-2003, 04:38 PM
I like the story, very original!

Maybe the giant can shudder for a few moments while his flesh burns black?

CRAM
03-09-2003, 08:11 PM
That would be a nasty site but excellent addition to the story line for graphic detail.

TCUBED
03-10-2003, 04:13 PM
Stories are the best when you can visualize the characters yourself and I enjoyed this a lot...very, hella cool.

IronMonk
03-12-2003, 05:52 AM
well i read you rstory and i liked it very much, great ideas. i have only a few comments, to deal with the problem of the giant dying too quickly, the lightning could instead of shrink it,

it could surround it in lighting, webbing all over the giant, and with one giant shudder splitting into thousands of shards of light leaveing only the floating body of an unconcious young elf suspended in the air. with al lthe energy subsideing the elf slowly slipped from the hands of the spell and came to a gentle rest on the ground, and thus the story of Raff could continue, in a new body, just as the sycle had continued for millenia.

feel free to use that however you please. the second is that there isnt much of an introduction, but how your story is written you dont need it.

you may also want to expand on the spell, you could have runus, sweapt up in a dance of magic, calling upon all the forces at his command, and the giant, witnessing this spectacle that has only been seen a handfull of times since the creation of time itself, was dumbstruck and could not force himself to do anyhting but watch his enevitable, and certainly painfull death.

that too you can use any way you see fit.

rylan mcphee
aka IronMonk

RaFF
03-13-2003, 07:59 PM
hey thnx guy! sure i will use it, I`m continueing this story offline now and when I have put some of ur ideas in i will upload it again... but i wont make it any longer cause this story is just about how my character is created, its not like a real story but maybe im gonna make some storys soon! :D

IronMonk
03-14-2003, 11:45 PM
no problem,

Kormath
03-14-2003, 11:49 PM
IronMonk, i think ur good at making story's do u have one of ur own, if not why don't u make one, Bcus i c that u have a great sence to make up such a story!!!

Kormath
03-14-2003, 11:52 PM
WOW, NEVER MIND I FOUND IT!!!!!!

GDAMN, HOW LONG DID U NEEDED 2 MAKE A STROY THAT LONG!!!!

ARE THERE GONNA BE A CHAPTER, 8-15???

Zuzzle
03-15-2003, 03:04 AM
ummm.... where is your new version? could you paste it again or something, cuz on my comp its not there! :cool:

IronMonk
03-15-2003, 05:20 AM
15, you have to be kidding me... im planning to wright 30

IronMonk
03-15-2003, 05:20 AM
15, you have to be kidding me... im planning to wright 30

Kormath
03-15-2003, 07:50 PM
i'm looking 4 ward to that story!!!!!!

And RaFF plzzz contineu ur Story!!!

IronMonk
03-16-2003, 08:45 AM
hey raff i was wondering if you wanted to make a cameo in my story? i'm currently working on the 9th chapter and i have an opening for you to make a small apperance. i would need some additional info on how your charactor is but it wouldnt be hard.

RaFF
03-16-2003, 01:43 PM
ok, I`m flattered :P
hehe but anywayz I dunno what my char will look like, I don`t even know what race its gonna be (I`m thinking of a half-elf) but i dunno yet because im still waiting for the races on the .com site.... hmmm maybe u can make an apeareance for me?
some cool half-elf like guy but i cant really help you because i dont have a great fantasy like you and i`m not as good in english as you so it would be cool if u make one for me :D

IronMonk
03-17-2003, 04:10 AM
sorry that i wasnt as explanitory as i could, i meant how your char would react to surcomestances, like are you a humorus kinda char that finds the laugh in everything , or are you a stone cold determined quiet type. the hopeless romantic. martial artist, brawler, bully. that sort of thing

Sproth
03-25-2003, 12:37 AM
good job i also think he did die to fast but it still is good

RaFF
03-26-2003, 05:35 PM
hey Ironmonk
yea well... I`m not good in english so I can`t really explain that.
anyway, it`s not stone cold, he`s humorus like u said and not quiet!
well... I dunno if he`s romantic, but yea make something fun of it! :D
and he isn`t a martial artist but he fights with a staff or maybe some sword and he`s some kinda wizzard... well he casts magic spells

so... it is a nice elf, humorus, romantic, magician and yea well.... u can make something better out it than me so I`ll leave the rest up to you, if ya wanna :D

~Ice~
03-26-2003, 05:38 PM
good job