It's a living

[Seton]

No sound must pass from my lips
I silently await my destiny
Sweet summer wind blowing through my hair
The moment has come to ready myself
Holding my breath
Fired my bow with deadly accuracy
It is done
I struck my target
Now I will return
Collecting my bounty
A feeling of satisfaction runs through my veins.

My first poem ever! What do you guys and gals think?

[Edited on 24/3/2003 by Seton]

[Revalence]

great job Seton, are you shure you havnt wrote pomes before? :) it flows well and tells a nice story. Just one thing though.. change hairs to hair :) and keep them coming Setona!

[Seton]

Thanx Revelance, I changed the hair thingy.
It really is my first poem, so it's extra nice to have someone more experienced asking me that :D
By the way did you purposly call me Setona? Or was that A a typo? Because Setona is more of a girl name. Now I know my avatar has long hair, but he is definetly a man (well at least half-man and half-elven that is ;))

I'll try to think up some more at work tomorrow, that's if I don't have too much to do :(

[Shazi]

Very nice :)

I think im gonna try to make a poem too... just for fun ;)

[~Ice~]

nice :)

[LiCh]

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh nice
but what happends next?
(theres your opening for yor second poem)

[Tubalcain]

Liked that- it had a simple charm. Most people who try their hand at poetry( including my embarassingly awful afforts when I was younger) tend to think poetry is about big words. Aint necessarily so.

[Absolution]

wow im gratful we have all these great poets

[Protoss®]

Well @ least if i need a good poet i know who to ask ;)

[Absolution]

although he is dark I respect the greatness of hs poem =)

[Disturbed155]

I think I'll try a poem too.

Going to the fair
On a fair day
:yltype: :mad2: :casstet:
Brutally murdering everybody in sight
Chopping off innocent bystanders heads
:yltype: :mad2: :casstet:
I guess I'm just not too good at this poetry stuff

[Seton]

Thank you guys for the positive feedback :D

And disturbed155; I guess it's obvious where you got your name from ;)

[blue_fire]

Lmao, disturbed, by name and by nature. Really good poem, its one of those few poems that paints a picture in your head and stays there