Ganoth-Ordrin story

[Ganoth-Ordrin]

[i]Long before the great seperation, before the majority of the world knew of the great magics lived a boy. A boy of great power, the son of a noble heir to that power and fortune, life was a blosoming rose for young Ganoth, every thing was a world of imagination for the boy. But his father had many cruel enemys of both humans and orcs alike. The great sorcerer Magnus the Cruel sent his army to slaughter the royal family. With surprising ease the evil forces ripped through the castle gaurds and stormed the palace. Ganoths father grabbed a sabre decoration from his wall determind to pretect his son from life to death...straight to death. Ganoths small body swelled with rage he leaped for his fathers sword cutting through the scourge. 20 long minutes....thats how long it took him to cleave down the evil presences. He then travelled with no food or water across the world being fed by his rage. Once he reached the treachorous castle that housed the vile plauge magnus he drew magic from the air around him and then ran dodged and leaped his way through the castle defences. He entered the mighty chamber of magnus the Cruel..[i/]

ill finish this later

[Pistols]

Good good, keep em comin.
I'm in the middle of a big solid writers block at the moment.

[~Ice~]

good good :)

[Seton]

I like the story, but I have a strange feeling like I'm reading it in fastforward-mode ;)

[Ganoth-Ordrin]

I should finish it soon but ya its not very detailed an it kind of just skips stuff :P i might fix that later

[~Ice~]

still it looks good, little fixes should be made like you said

[Bluenose]

Nice, but I agree with Seton, its pretty fast paced.

[Fhman]

I like the storyline. Rage, revenge, evil it's all there.

Like the others said. It seems a shame to whiz through the plot so fast. Personally I'd like to hear the about the boys battle with his fathers killers What were the odds, how did he win, did anyone help him etc). That alone should consume a chapter.

Good luck with the rest of it.

[Absolution]

great story! Fhman like your sig...

*Pet Pet*

[Kalico]

ya definetly good story!

[Ganoth-Ordrin]

Im restarting with a new consept but similar:) i hope to start it soon. And ill try to be less lazy and do it in more detail.

[Braaaah_de_Pit]

Yes longer and more detail.. you nearly write like a Troll (j/kg) ;)

[blue_fire]

Yeah, please write more
i like it when there is magic involved, makes for an interesting battle.